Comments for In a tiny nutty shell

Comment on Postsecret by bgexperiments

bgexperiments — Tue, 12 Feb 2008 23:21:00 +0000

Thanks for this, Ashleigh! I’m pointing my spring class to it as another way to tell a story.

Comment on 100 Words on Airplanes by Cloe

Cloe — Fri, 08 Feb 2008 05:59:13 +0000

Very cool! I like the H shape. Clever. I like the line “people jump into the laps of flight attendants.”

Comment on People watching by Cloe

Cloe — Wed, 30 Jan 2008 02:59:18 +0000

I had a similar experience today in the airport (I am now home) when a man checked my passport and boarding pass, trying to engage a conversation. I thought it about the entire time on the drive back to the city. It’s interesting that you wrote about this thought on the same day!

Comment on Written Speech of Multimedia by Ashleigh

Ashleigh — Wed, 30 Jan 2008 01:10:54 +0000

It’s interesting to see which words didn’t stick, as I though that the eerie angles and ‘no one can touch what is mine’ were extra emphasized with the images. But at the same time, black or white might serve to emphasize words more. Thanks for the thoughts

Comment on 100 words on Clocks by jenjen9887

jenjen9887 — Wed, 30 Jan 2008 00:47:02 +0000

I loved the image of the battle scars marking who you were and what you turned into. This is a really cool piece. I think it would be really interesting to expand on the ideas you have begun here.

Comment on 100 words on Clocks by Jessica

Jessica — Mon, 28 Jan 2008 20:42:40 +0000

I love the image of a snake with a freshly eaten mouse inside…

Comment on 100 Words on Stretching by tlblog

tlblog — Mon, 28 Jan 2008 16:38:02 +0000

I like how you make the word”stretching” your background of your writting, instead of the focus of the piece.

Comment on Written Speech of Multimedia by Cloe

Cloe — Fri, 25 Jan 2008 15:36:22 +0000

Ashleigh, after seeing your piece, it is really cool to just read the storyline on the page. Coming from an outside perspective, I’m going to let you know which parts of your writing may not have been as emphasized as you might want them to be. (Obviously this depends on what you want to emphasize.) But below I am going to mention which words did not stick with me when I saw the piece as a multimedia project:

“at eerie angles”
“chlorine”
“No one can touch what is mine”

And as we were all talking about, you could use black slides or white flash-slides to emphasize your voice and the words rather than the images at particular moments.

I really like the way you crafted your sentences. This piece is a lot more than a description of water polo and winning a game.

Comment on 100 Words of Multimedia by Jessica

Jessica — Fri, 25 Jan 2008 01:24:24 +0000

At first, I read this quickly, thinking it was the text of the spoken component of your multimedia story. I didn’t realize this afternoon how much the phrase “put the ball to bed in the safety of the net” stuck out, but I remembered that bit and was looking for it in this post; I think I realized it was something else only when I couldn’t find that particular – and apparently memorable – segment…

With that said, do you think you could post the script of what you were reading? At points it became difficult to hear you and I’m curious to see what you were saying…. If you’re going to do a revision, it might be interesting to think about how much the viewer/reader might actually hear versus what might have gotten lost…

Comment on 100 words on Lightning by Cloe

Cloe — Thu, 24 Jan 2008 02:40:19 +0000

Ashleigh, this piece is powerful. Because you are describing running and are describing a race against lightning, as a reader I feel obligated to read quickly and thoroughly through these 100 words. “The acrid smell of the approaching storm”… I like that. I would have never thought to combine that description with a storm, but the adjectives completely work for me here and make me feel like something ominous is looming.