Written Speech of Multimedia January 25, 2008
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Wet, icy water invigorates my starved legs with three minutes counting down.
The glassy surface shatters as legs and arms explode into rhythmic propellers and we chase down the yellow ball. It gasps for air just as I do.
We attack like Piranhas in the churning white water arena. Bodies slap together at eerie angles as we perform a tantric contortionist’s dance.
My head explodes and water sears through my nose and down my throat. The chlorine burns as it claws into my lungs like the nails slicing my back.
Momentarily intertwined, we become one person fighting to breathe, to break away, to put the ball to bed in the safety of the net.
Rogue elbows and knees lash out and desire pulls us into an animalistic battle. In a burst of energy I rip myself free from the underworld’s disorienting grip.
I plow through the sea of unattached limbs, deaf to the crowd. No one can touch what is mine.
I rise out of the water and drive the ball past a wall of arms. I score
Ashleigh, after seeing your piece, it is really cool to just read the storyline on the page. Coming from an outside perspective, I’m going to let you know which parts of your writing may not have been as emphasized as you might want them to be. (Obviously this depends on what you want to emphasize.) But below I am going to mention which words did not stick with me when I saw the piece as a multimedia project:
“at eerie angles”
“chlorine”
“No one can touch what is mine”
And as we were all talking about, you could use black slides or white flash-slides to emphasize your voice and the words rather than the images at particular moments.
I really like the way you crafted your sentences. This piece is a lot more than a description of water polo and winning a game.
It’s interesting to see which words didn’t stick, as I though that the eerie angles and ‘no one can touch what is mine’ were extra emphasized with the images. But at the same time, black or white might serve to emphasize words more. Thanks for the thoughts